By Patrice M. Wilson
Honolulu Branch
Long thin palm leaves throw
shadows like darkened fingers
on hungry ground awaiting
winter rain to feed
our summer-dried souls
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Very fine tanka, Patricia. It’s a really nice and disciplined form. You bring the palm shadows and the ground to life, and “summer-dried souls” concludes it perfectly.
Thank you! This poem is based on a 5-line Japanese form called a tanka. The lines are 5 syllables, then 7, 5, 7 and 7.. I altered the form a little, to 5, 7, 7, 5, 5. I am glad you enjoyed reading it.
So powerful! In so few words, this poem is complete.
Love the imagery!