Jenny Santana
Iowa City Branch
I sit
on a park bench
quiet and still
watching the ants
scurry hurriedly along the pavement
and above me
the sparrows fly
puncturing the sky
like liberated darts
while the monarch butterflies
bounce and weave
on circuitous routes
and wistful bees
perch upon
flowers’ buds
trembling in the air
until
a breeze comes by
and lifts them
haphazardly
away.
Beneath the shifting daylight
of a cloud-speckled sky
as the world turns
with ferocious
velocity
I sit
motionless
waiting
for you
to love me.
Perfect title, and the excellent details of the busyness of nature contrast so well with the poem’s ending.
Love the imagery and the contrasting end thought. Profound poem.
I love the connection of simplicity, depth, and longing. The last part makes it more powerful and deep, leading the reader to wonder where the desired love will come from.
I appreciate your imagery and the gentle intensity that leads to “waiting for you to love me.” I felt a wee bit sad at the end. Thanks for sharing.
Just tranquility personified. Special.
A beautiful, true poem filled with delightful visual imagerage. It contained a sense of place and a moment in time. Thank you for publishing this poem. Jowy Santana has included universality and her own personal life experience. Excellent choice of title as well.
A lovely bit of nature and hope.
I am much moved by your thoughts. Your delicate language imagery brings the moment to life with great impact. Thank you.
Jenny, I love this. I love the way the images build, one upon the other, until they climax in the “ferocious velocity” of the spinning earth, only to collide with the final thought, giving it profound presence. This is a powerfully wrought poem! Thanks for sharing.